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 * In 2279 James Martin was born to a family that served in Starfleet during the conflicts between the Romulans and Klingons and made it out in both conflicts alive and he was wanting to serve in Starfleet just like his great grandparents and parents.

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 * Vice Admiral James Martin is the father of Commander James Martin in Star Trek: The New Generation.

First paragraph should be more like this:
 * Vice Admiral James Martin was a Starfleet officer and father of Commander John Martin in the late 24th century. (Star Trek: The New Generation)